Commenting on each other's writing.

I have posted some of the creative responses below. Please give them some feedback so that they have the experience of response from real readers.

What features of Frayn's style have they used? How have they captured a sense of character? Are there particular words or features that you think are very successful. Is there anything that isn't as convincing.

Please be positive, constructive and give specific examples.

Have a good half term,

Ms W :-)